Great start! I'm really digging the new story format.
Seems off to a great start so far. Can't wait to see where the story lines go from here!
ooh, I like.. can't wait for more!
Holy crap you got alot to work with! Well done. Cant wait to see where it goes.
me likes. a lot.
Nice, spleen land sounds cool.
Bloody hell!That was a flying start. I like the gritty story overlapping with the sexual stuff, and the pushy parents and the aggro couple... neat stuff.And all in six pages.
I think it seemed too disjointed. I felt like I was reading parts of different stories rather than one story. Needs some sort of device to tie it together somehow. It's almost like you are trying to do too much at once. Not sure that will work for those who aren't already Spleenal fans.
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